Thursday, July 15, 2010

Just Business

“Another moneymaking scheme,” he said. “Great.”

“No,” she said, grabbing his arm before he turned away. ‘This one will actually work. Really.”

He couldn’t even summon the energy to sigh. He simply stared at her, taking in the fiery energy behind her green eyes.

Her smile almost melted him. Her enthusiasm almost sucked him right back in.


“Give it up, Karen.”

He set his empty glass on the counter then headed straight for the door.

“Come on,” she said. “I’ve got it all planned out. It’s perfect.”

“Sorry,” he said, closing the door behind him.

She stood still for a long moment, drained her own glass, set it down and retrieved a large plastic bag. 

Using a cloth, she placed his glass into the bag, then set about wiping the doorknob.

She looked around the room then, satisfied, reached for the phone.

“It’s me,” she said. “He’ll be dead within the hour. No, of course, no way to trace anything back to you. Or me. I’ll expect to see the other half in my account first thing tomorrow morning, before my flight leaves.”

She smiled. “Nice doing business with you, too, ma’am.”


Laura Eno said...

Nice business...I guess the new money scheme worked for her after all. ;)

Thom Gabrukiewicz said...

Ouch. Nice twist at the end and the dialogue is spot-on. Money is money, of course.

Jen said...

I didn't see it coming! Yikes.

Anonymous said...

Yeah, that worked. Neat, sweet, nothing wasted.

Becky said...

She's so bad.
What next? What next?

Tomara Armstrong said...

HA! I was expecting Amway or Arbonne... not murder.

But it works sooooo much better.
Great Story,

Laurita said...

So much more rewarding than tupperware. Great dialogue.